Madii | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 2:41 PM | Message # 1 |
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| You were walking down the street with (Friend or Family Member), and you pause as you hear the roar of an engine behind you. You turn around, surprised, and see a car heading straight for you. An unrecognizable man is drving, with his window open. He takes out a pistol, and shoots at you and (Friend/Family Member). It hits your arm, making you fall to the ground, writhing in pain. The man shoots again, and it hits (Friend/Family Member) in the chest, and as they fell to the ground, you could see the life drain from their eyes. Anger boils in you, but you can do nothing as you lay on the ground, bleeding from the wound in your arm. As the stranger drives away, you can clearly see what the man was wearing. A black tuxedo, tinted sunglasses, and a black fedora shading his face. In an instant, you recognize where he's from. You had heard thousands of rumors around the city about these people. 'The Mob', as people call them. Mafia. It's said that once they find a target, they will stop at nothing to either get them to join, or kill them. If their offer is refused, the target is killed. When The Mob finds a target, they kill all of their connections, so when the target goes missing, the police assumes they are dead too. And The Mob stops at nothing to get what they want.
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(Edited by Demon)
Added (2012-09-16, 2:41 PM) --------------------------------------------- (Is this alot better?)
Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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Demon | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 2:52 PM | Message # 2 |
※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| (There's still a lot of spelling mistakes, and it's rather bland.)
ಠ_ಠ (づ  ̄ ³ ̄)づ um
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Madii | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 3:26 PM | Message # 3 |
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| Help me then please
Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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Demon | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 3:29 PM | Message # 4 |
※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| (alright. Do you want me to edit it? Or send you a PM of an improved version?)
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Madii | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 3:44 PM | Message # 5 |
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Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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Demon | Date: Monday, 2012-09-17, 8:03 AM | Message # 6 |
※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| (I edited it a lot, if you want to to change it, just tell me. I tried to form a bit of a plot, as well.)
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Madii | Date: Monday, 2012-09-17, 6:51 PM | Message # 7 |
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| (thanks it looks great)
Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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