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| Madii | Date: Tuesday, 2012-09-11, 9:20 PM | Message # 1 |
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| I go out to the street, and this car goes by. There is a man driving. he takes out a gun, and shoots it. It Hit me in the arm i drop down e shuts agan it hits (someone u love alot) in the chest and kills them you know this person he did it to some of ur friends to do u want revenge? so you and ur friends get together and go after him..........(form plot as go along??)
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Name
Gender
age
apperince
bio
do u want revenge
skill(only one)
other
What love one did it hit and kill?
Please comment to help it get better did it of the top of my head haha(:
Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Tuesday, 2012-09-11, 9:57 PM | Message # 2 |
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| (Grammar would help... More details would also be nice. And sometimes a developing plot is good, but I think this needs more structure. No offense.)
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Message edited by Kenzieroo - Wednesday, 2012-09-12, 9:41 AM |
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| Demon | Date: Wednesday, 2012-09-12, 2:27 PM | Message # 3 |
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| Madii | Date: Wednesday, 2012-09-12, 5:21 PM | Message # 4 |
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| ya sorry i wrote it fast so, can i edit it?
Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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| Demon | Date: Wednesday, 2012-09-12, 5:35 PM | Message # 5 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| Madii | Date: Wednesday, 2012-09-12, 7:20 PM | Message # 6 |
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Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Wednesday, 2012-09-12, 7:36 PM | Message # 7 |
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| Madii | Date: Wednesday, 2012-09-12, 9:01 PM | Message # 8 |
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Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Wednesday, 2012-09-12, 9:23 PM | Message # 9 |
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| Equinox | Date: Thursday, 2012-09-13, 8:27 PM | Message # 10 |
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Friday, 2012-09-14, 8:07 AM | Message # 11 |
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I go out to the street, and this car goes by. There is a man driving. he takes out a gun, and shoots it. It hit me in the arm, I drop down and he shoots again. it hits [Someone you love a lot] in the chest and kills them. You know this person he did it to some of your friends too. Do you want revenge? So you and your friends get together and go after him...
*CS*
Name:
Age:
Gender:
Appearance:
Skill(Only one):
Bio(At lest add revenge or no):
Loved one?:
Other:
On The Edge Of Imagination And Logic
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| Madii | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 2:08 PM | Message # 12 |
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Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 2:23 PM | Message # 13 |
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| Madii | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 2:32 PM | Message # 14 |
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Hey! im madi ya thats it!! haha(:
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| Jigajig | Date: Sunday, 2012-09-16, 2:33 PM | Message # 15 |
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