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I think the story is very original, but could've had a bit more detail, such as what kind of monsters were releashed, and a few other things, but other than that it's very good for the first time!
There were only a few small errors. As well as needing to put ""s around what the box said, and just mainly using one word wrong in a sentence or forgetting a space.
You kind of took a sortcut doing appearance, but I really can't judge you for doing that since I did that same thing. you forgot to put gender on the CS as well, and there was no bio. Also, not much info for personality. Anyways, I'm not sure what character Detail has to do with the RP itself and I'll probably re-make the Review sheet at some later point in time, so this won't even really matter...
For now no rating since it hasn't started...
There were only a few errors in grammar, good story, pretty good character detail, altogether, a very good RP! Especially good for a first try! I hope to re-review this once I fix up the Review format, since I don't like the current one.
~Zyphon, The Flying Penguin
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