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_/\_The Changers_/\_ (My 3rd roleplay..)
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| Supernerd | Date: Sunday, 2011-10-09, 1:16 AM | Message # 1 |
 A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| Oh? So you think this is cool? To be a Change? No, its not, its a nightmare, a nightmare that i hope that never happens to anybody else....i only wished that my hope was true...Listen. Having these powers are a pain in the ass,the cops are after us,so are the TAPA, The Anti Power Association... having scientists wanting to know how we do such amazing powers that we do with our hands, or well, anything. Don't ask me how I got them, cause i don't know...I was just a kid just like you, a family...a home, but thats gone now. All i have are my guts, and instincts, to help me pass each minute, each hour, each day...if you see this message,and if you are one of me, read this message carefully. Never trust anyone you see...never trust any one of your own, not even me, y'see,they have spies, they use them..to plot there next strategy on us, on how to capture us, in case were somehow giving a "virus" to anyone..we already had to kill one of our own..lets just hope your not next. All I can say is...its a hard life to be me, a Changer.
(Sorry couldnt really think of anything good to call the people with powers...XD)
-Changer Character sheet-
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapon(s)?(Dont have to have one):
Powers(Two please..no more than that.):
When were you a Changer?:
Bio:
Other: (Sorta for like giving a tip about how you can calm down your character or like foreshadowing)
-T.A.P.A Spy Character Sheet- (No more than two...)
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapons(?):
Powers(Once again no more than two):
When were you a changer?:
When you were caught(Can be at birth...):
Bio:
Other: (same as the other other,)
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Reviews
~Equinox~
Story:3/5
It's got a story, but not a REAL story. It's hard to explain. There's a story from a unknown person's view, but not a plot for any long term story.
Grammar:4/5
It's got some good grammar, but just a FEW mistakes. A very few.
Character detail:4/5
Very nice character sheets and variety of character values. It's well done.
Plot Development:2.5/5
It's got a bit of a plot. Trying to put up with being a changeling. Not a massive or expansive plot though, so it's not a very good plot development, but it's got some possibilities.
Overall rating:3/5
Honestly, this is a pretty good RP. I don't plan on joining, but I must say if I had about 1 cell more in my brain to put up with making a CS, I would gladly join. Don't think this is a bad RP because I don't feel like joining, it's honestly really good. My laziness is just getting to me from work.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
Message edited by Supernerd - Sunday, 2011-10-09, 12:14 PM |
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| Equinox | Date: Thursday, 2012-01-12, 3:35 PM | Message # 1126 |
 Social warrior of the administration
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| "Tell me. Do you have any knives with power draining effects?"
"One."
"That's all I need."
~Glacial Malphite: The Shard of the Monolith~
"I hear rumors that the Shard of the Monolith is an unstoppable force. They aren't rumors."-Nausus, on the topic of Malphite's arrival.
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| Evie | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 3:21 PM | Message # 1127 |
 RP'er Without A Life
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| It was dark on the luggage conveyor belt. It was just a long dark tunnel that never ended. Even though Issac had a tight grip on my hand I still felt scared and alone. I wish it would end. Now. "What next?" I asked quietly. I regretted talking right away. Even I could hear the fear in my voice.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 3:56 PM | Message # 1128 |
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| Cody-
I smiled. "Lets start heading then. Iris? Brisk?" I said, motioning towards them, asking if they were ready.
Isaac-
The conveyor belt eventually dropped the luggage, and us. into a pile of suitcases that were in a big bag. Which were soon getting stacked onto 'rack' cars by men and women. I tugged her hand weakly...god. There was an airplane about 100 meters away, with a conveyor belt going into the bottom of the plane of where we were heading. "we go up that conveyor belt, into the bottom of the plane, their will be nobody inside there, since its just meant for luggage." We got up and I jogged tugging Virra lightly along and we both got onto the conveyor belt, avoiding the luggage that was also on it. (Evie, think of toy story 1 or 2, at the airplane scene when Buzz and Woody are at the bottom of the plane in the luggage, im pretty sure you've seen it, xD)
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 4:28 PM | Message # 1129 |
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From the Forest
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| ~Cat
"I know your not good with nature, but it's a super easy from me so it should be ok for you."
"Ok, I'll try," she sigh then giggles.
On The Edge Of Imagination And Logic
Message edited by Kenzieroo - Saturday, 2012-01-14, 4:30 PM |
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 4:29 PM | Message # 1130 |
 ※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| I stood up. "Lets go"
~Iris~
I followed after them.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 4:36 PM | Message # 1131 |
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From the Forest
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| ~Cat
The air went stale after a few minutes of silence, my ears perk up trying to find out if anyone else was near.
On The Edge Of Imagination And Logic
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| Evie | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 4:38 PM | Message # 1132 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| I followed all the way still a bit scared. But I tried my best not to show it as we ending the luggage space of the plane.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 5:53 PM | Message # 1133 |
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| Cody-
I walked firmly forward. Heading towards the city. "We have to hide you Iris, and what better in the city? I know the streets well cause of T.A.P.A training, they -" I continued to go about T.A.P.A.
Isaac-
Once we entered, I tugged with my hand and used the last bit of my energy to get away from the entrance of the suitcase thing, I was now breathinging heavily, and once we were about 10 meters away. I let go of her hand, and the icyness that was with me and her disappeared as we became visible again. I landed on a suitcase, breathing heavily. Eyes barely open.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 5:57 PM | Message # 1134 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| I listened to Cody and followed, even though I already knew what he was talking about.
~Iris~
I listened intently. "So do I need a disquise?"
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 6:03 PM | Message # 1135 |
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| Cody-
"And I-" I stopped walking as she asked that question, staring at her. "I honestly don't know, I don't know if he can sense your power, and he's never seen you before...so I think you'll be good....for now." I added quietly at the end as I started to walk again, leaving an awkward silence in the air as we walked.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Evie | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 6:03 PM | Message # 1136 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| The strange feeling left me and I noticed Issac barely awake. "Hey, are you ok?"
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Equinox | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 6:05 PM | Message # 1137 |
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| "Of course she's fine, why wouldn't she be?" Forlorn says, he was walking right beside Cody, as if he hadn't a care.
~Glacial Malphite: The Shard of the Monolith~
"I hear rumors that the Shard of the Monolith is an unstoppable force. They aren't rumors."-Nausus, on the topic of Malphite's arrival.
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 6:07 PM | Message # 1138 |
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| (Dont you mean cody?.....Cause cody is with Iris. Or do you actually mean Isaac? Whos in a plane?)
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Equinox | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 6:09 PM | Message # 1139 |
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| (fixed.)
~Glacial Malphite: The Shard of the Monolith~
"I hear rumors that the Shard of the Monolith is an unstoppable force. They aren't rumors."-Nausus, on the topic of Malphite's arrival.
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2012-01-14, 6:10 PM | Message # 1140 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| ~Brisk~
"Well, look who's here" I snorted.
~Iris~
"Who's that?" I cocked my head to the side.
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