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_/\_The Changers_/\_ (My 3rd roleplay..)
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| Supernerd | Date: Sunday, 2011-10-09, 1:16 AM | Message # 1 |
 A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| Oh? So you think this is cool? To be a Change? No, its not, its a nightmare, a nightmare that i hope that never happens to anybody else....i only wished that my hope was true...Listen. Having these powers are a pain in the ass,the cops are after us,so are the TAPA, The Anti Power Association... having scientists wanting to know how we do such amazing powers that we do with our hands, or well, anything. Don't ask me how I got them, cause i don't know...I was just a kid just like you, a family...a home, but thats gone now. All i have are my guts, and instincts, to help me pass each minute, each hour, each day...if you see this message,and if you are one of me, read this message carefully. Never trust anyone you see...never trust any one of your own, not even me, y'see,they have spies, they use them..to plot there next strategy on us, on how to capture us, in case were somehow giving a "virus" to anyone..we already had to kill one of our own..lets just hope your not next. All I can say is...its a hard life to be me, a Changer.
(Sorry couldnt really think of anything good to call the people with powers...XD)
-Changer Character sheet-
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapon(s)?(Dont have to have one):
Powers(Two please..no more than that.):
When were you a Changer?:
Bio:
Other: (Sorta for like giving a tip about how you can calm down your character or like foreshadowing)
-T.A.P.A Spy Character Sheet- (No more than two...)
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapons(?):
Powers(Once again no more than two):
When were you a changer?:
When you were caught(Can be at birth...):
Bio:
Other: (same as the other other,)
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Reviews
~Equinox~
Story:3/5
It's got a story, but not a REAL story. It's hard to explain. There's a story from a unknown person's view, but not a plot for any long term story.
Grammar:4/5
It's got some good grammar, but just a FEW mistakes. A very few.
Character detail:4/5
Very nice character sheets and variety of character values. It's well done.
Plot Development:2.5/5
It's got a bit of a plot. Trying to put up with being a changeling. Not a massive or expansive plot though, so it's not a very good plot development, but it's got some possibilities.
Overall rating:3/5
Honestly, this is a pretty good RP. I don't plan on joining, but I must say if I had about 1 cell more in my brain to put up with making a CS, I would gladly join. Don't think this is a bad RP because I don't feel like joining, it's honestly really good. My laziness is just getting to me from work.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
Message edited by Supernerd - Sunday, 2011-10-09, 12:14 PM |
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-05, 6:43 AM | Message # 301 |
 ※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| "Well, Im Brisk."
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| Evie | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-05, 1:20 PM | Message # 302 |
 RP'er Without A Life
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| Running,running, running right out of the forest down the rode and into the city. I moved through the crowds of people and into a small coffee shop, it wasn't safe but I thought I had earned a coffee. I took my steaming cup to go and walked down the streets then turned down an alley for a shortcut. Looking around cautiously I saw an old homeless guy holding out a small tin cup. The change in my pocket jingled and I bent down to give the old man the change noticing a familiar tattoo on the mans collar bone, it read TAPA. Surprised I jumped back but the old man was also fast, He lunged at me and it was too late, I felt a sharp needle dig into my neck then everything went black.....
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-05, 6:37 PM | Message # 303 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
Group: Special
Messages: 3145
Status: Offline
| (let me guess, u want me to roleplay as the T.A.P.A Agent) I groaned, stirring a little bit more.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-05, 7:12 PM | Message # 304 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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Messages: 9627
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| I growled abit as he moved. "Hes waking up"
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| Zombo104 | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-05, 11:34 PM | Message # 305 |
 Famous RP'er
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Messages: 831
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| I sat there and waited, not sure if I should believe this Brisk person that Isaac was a TAPA spy.
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Evie | Date: Sunday, 2011-11-06, 3:57 AM | Message # 306 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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Messages: 2382
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| My eyes fluttered open it was so bright, I couldn't see anything. Distant voices echoed around me, to whom they belonged to I didn't know. A sensation like pins and needles ran all through my body and when I tried to move I couldn't. It was the most terrible feeling ever, like I was trapped in my body and couldn't access my muscles or memories...what was happening? There was a sharp pain in my arm and it felt as cold water had been injected into my veins. The coolness traveled from my arm to my toes and the top of my head. The brightness faded and blue swirls of light turned to darkness.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Demon | Date: Sunday, 2011-11-06, 6:53 AM | Message # 307 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
Group: Administrators
Messages: 9627
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| "Lets see his reaction" I smirked.
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| Evie | Date: Sunday, 2011-11-06, 2:52 PM | Message # 308 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| When I woke up memories flooded into my mind, the boy in the cave , the coffee shop, the old man, his tattoo...I tried to scream but no sound came out of my mouth. Oh no, the TAPA agency had me...again. I tried to sit up but my arms and legs were strapped down to the table. The door in the corner of the room squeaked and opened, it was my father.
"Hello darling have you missed me?" He asked. I didn't answer his voice disgusted me. "I haven't seen you since the last time you came in for the tests, I hope your not uncomfortable but I can't risk you getting away again. I need you so I can fix everyone else." He purred.
"Your Insane, We may be different but were not freaks, we don't need to change!" I yelled at him. My whole body erupted into flames so hot he flew against the wall and was knocked unconscious. The straps that bound me melted and the sprinklers came on and put out my fire.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Zombo104 | Date: Sunday, 2011-11-06, 7:38 PM | Message # 309 |
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Famous RP'er
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| I poked Isaac getting impatient with how long it was taking him to wake up, "Isaac?"
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Demon | Date: Monday, 2011-11-07, 2:45 PM | Message # 310 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
Group: Administrators
Messages: 9627
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| "Ugh. Heres one thing. Be hostile. Dont make him feel safe"
I knew plenty of things that can count as mental torture...
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| Evie | Date: Monday, 2011-11-07, 8:23 PM | Message # 311 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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Messages: 2382
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| I ran out of the testing room and in to a white hall that seemed to stretch on forever. I hated using my powers but my knives were gone so I sped down the hallways avoiding guards. The alarm blared and an announcer came on describing my appearance and informing everyone that I was "A dangerous changer who wouldn't think twice before killing". After the announcement had been made five times as many guards spilled out of almost every room causing me to slip into the closest door hopefully unnoticed. Note to self, don't go to get coffee from the city anymore
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Zombo104 | Date: Monday, 2011-11-07, 9:41 PM | Message # 312 |
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| "I usually am hostile," I told Brisk "but not once I get to know some one a little bit, plus I feel like I can trust Isaac now because when I found him here he couldn't remember anything...."
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Demon | Date: Monday, 2011-11-07, 10:23 PM | Message # 313 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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Messages: 9627
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| "Uhuh. Dont tell me you believe him.... I believed his tall tales at first... He's just a big ass liar"
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| Supernerd | Date: Tuesday, 2011-11-08, 2:31 AM | Message # 314 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
Group: Special
Messages: 3145
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| I groaned, opening my eyes slowly, I blinked, seeing two girls, the one I saw earlier on...and the other one-my eyes widened as clips of "videos" entered my head, thelast clip was a foot to the face. "Someone kicked me....you." i pointed at the girl (brisk) "are giving me flashbacks....why?" Added (2011-11-08, 2:31 Am)
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(wont be on much...in Hawaii in a day. Or right now, depends when ur reading this.)
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Tuesday, 2011-11-08, 8:05 AM | Message # 315 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
Group: Administrators
Messages: 9627
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| (Hawaii? D:
Lucky./...)
"Cause I knocked you out, dumbass"
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