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_/\_The Changers_/\_ (My 3rd roleplay..)
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| Supernerd | Date: Sunday, 2011-10-09, 1:16 AM | Message # 1 |
 A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| Oh? So you think this is cool? To be a Change? No, its not, its a nightmare, a nightmare that i hope that never happens to anybody else....i only wished that my hope was true...Listen. Having these powers are a pain in the ass,the cops are after us,so are the TAPA, The Anti Power Association... having scientists wanting to know how we do such amazing powers that we do with our hands, or well, anything. Don't ask me how I got them, cause i don't know...I was just a kid just like you, a family...a home, but thats gone now. All i have are my guts, and instincts, to help me pass each minute, each hour, each day...if you see this message,and if you are one of me, read this message carefully. Never trust anyone you see...never trust any one of your own, not even me, y'see,they have spies, they use them..to plot there next strategy on us, on how to capture us, in case were somehow giving a "virus" to anyone..we already had to kill one of our own..lets just hope your not next. All I can say is...its a hard life to be me, a Changer.
(Sorry couldnt really think of anything good to call the people with powers...XD)
-Changer Character sheet-
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapon(s)?(Dont have to have one):
Powers(Two please..no more than that.):
When were you a Changer?:
Bio:
Other: (Sorta for like giving a tip about how you can calm down your character or like foreshadowing)
-T.A.P.A Spy Character Sheet- (No more than two...)
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapons(?):
Powers(Once again no more than two):
When were you a changer?:
When you were caught(Can be at birth...):
Bio:
Other: (same as the other other,)
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Reviews
~Equinox~
Story:3/5
It's got a story, but not a REAL story. It's hard to explain. There's a story from a unknown person's view, but not a plot for any long term story.
Grammar:4/5
It's got some good grammar, but just a FEW mistakes. A very few.
Character detail:4/5
Very nice character sheets and variety of character values. It's well done.
Plot Development:2.5/5
It's got a bit of a plot. Trying to put up with being a changeling. Not a massive or expansive plot though, so it's not a very good plot development, but it's got some possibilities.
Overall rating:3/5
Honestly, this is a pretty good RP. I don't plan on joining, but I must say if I had about 1 cell more in my brain to put up with making a CS, I would gladly join. Don't think this is a bad RP because I don't feel like joining, it's honestly really good. My laziness is just getting to me from work.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
Message edited by Supernerd - Sunday, 2011-10-09, 12:14 PM |
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| Evie | Date: Tuesday, 2011-11-08, 10:34 AM | Message # 316 |
 RP'er Without A Life
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| Taking an emergency exit I ran right out the side door and back on to the busy streets, maybe if there was so many "normal" people they wouldn't shoot at me. Now I needed to find the other changers...warn them my dad was crazier then I thought and now had the medicine to numb your powers so they were not possible to use. Better finding out now rather then later I thought.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Supernerd | Date: Tuesday, 2011-11-08, 7:37 PM | Message # 317 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| A look of anger came to my face. "Why would you do that?! You stuck up bitch!"
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Tuesday, 2011-11-08, 10:44 PM | Message # 318 |
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| "Both of you shut up, and calm down! I hear someone coming" I shouted at both of them
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Demon | Date: Wednesday, 2011-11-09, 4:08 PM | Message # 319 |
 ※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| I rolled my eyes. Thankfully, I had some ducktape in my pocket. I pulled it out and ripped off a decent sized piece, and stuck it on Isaacs mouth. I used the rest of it to tie his hands and legs.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Evie | Date: Wednesday, 2011-11-09, 8:51 PM | Message # 320 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| As I ran the strange coolness came back. It spread to my toes as I reached the edge of the forest, then spreading slowly to my head causing me to move slower and slower. When I'd finally reached the mouth of the cave, standing there for a moment I mumbled, "My father...." then collapsed and hit the ground hard, everything went black.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Zombo104 | Date: Wednesday, 2011-11-09, 9:25 PM | Message # 321 |
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| I looked over to the mouth of the cave and saw the person we had seen earlier. "Oh,no....." I quickly rushed over and started to drag her inside. "The TAPA must have....... but then that means....... she better wake up soon" I started mumbling to myself then said to Brisk, "The TAPA should be here soon, we all have to hide, and I don't care if you say we should leave Isaac behind, he's coming with us, he could be useful."
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Evie | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 0:23 AM | Message # 322 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| I woke up again being dragged on the ground. The girl dragging me looked panicked. "They didn't follow me, they can't follow me I'm too fast.", I told her. Then slowly I got unsteadily to my feet. Issac sat on the ground mumbling angrily to himself his mouth was covered with duck tape and it was also wrapped around his arms and legs. "Hes not a T.A.P.A spy, we were wrong." I said directing it to Brisk.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Supernerd | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 5:25 AM | Message # 323 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| (Despite the fact Isaac is a T.A.P.A. Spy, and how the scientist told brisk about me capturing her...yyyeeaahh, hes tottaly not a spy XD)
My eyes widened in confusion, I am a spy?? For T.A.P.A? What the hell doesnt that even mean!? I thought bitterly, i struggled against the tape...man that bitch had something against me.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Evie | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 10:38 AM | Message # 324 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| (Oops I'm getting some stuff screwed up  But I was just trying to help your whole situation.  )
I looked at the two girls said, " I used to be a T.A.P.A agent. My dad hes the head scientist, my mother was a changer too, like me and all it took was a test gone wrong to pull her out of my life... forever. I think thats what made my dad go crazy. After that when he found out I was a changer too the tests started on me. I ran away and haven't seen him since today its been 5 years."
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Demon | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 3:02 PM | Message # 325 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| I nodded. "Who said I was letting him go? Trust me, once I make a grudge, I KEEP that grudge. And this kid, he has a hell of alot of pain ahead of him" I growled. "You really shouldnt mess with me... Might as well say Im from the depths of Hell itself" I smirked, and glaned at Isaac. He already knew..
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 5:11 PM | Message # 326 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| My eyes widenef in realization as she glanced at me. I remembered. I remembered everything, and now that damn bitch is ruining my plans! But I had to keep up the act...I had to try, I couldnt let her torture me. I quickly changed my face to a blank expression, with one eyebrow raised. "Why are you doing this to me? I dont deserve to be in pain! To be tortured! " i said raising my voice.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Evie | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 5:32 PM | Message # 327 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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Messages: 2382
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| "Brisk you have every reason and right to hurt him, but for now just let it go. You can torture him all you want after we break into T.A.P.A. We might need him." I told her that and smirked back. I grabbed Issac by the back of his shirt and lifted to his feet while they were still taped. I took my sharp pocket knife out and flashed it in Issac's face,"Try anything, and theres no mercy next time."
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Demon | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 6:31 PM | Message # 328 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| "Heh. Im starting to like you" I smiled. "Dont fall into any of his acts... He should be an actor" I laughed, rolling my eyes.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 7:09 PM | Message # 329 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| I stared at the knife, then at the girl, and then at brisk. "What are you guys going to do to me?..."I said quietly, in a small tone, with a defeated look in my eyes, but in the back of my mind, I was scheming, They would find me soon...
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Thursday, 2011-11-10, 7:22 PM | Message # 330 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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Messages: 9627
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| I rolled my eyes. "Dumbass. Youre stupid acts wont work. Give it up"
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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