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_/\_The Changers_/\_ (My 3rd roleplay..)
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| Supernerd | Date: Sunday, 2011-10-09, 1:16 AM | Message # 1 |
 A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| Oh? So you think this is cool? To be a Change? No, its not, its a nightmare, a nightmare that i hope that never happens to anybody else....i only wished that my hope was true...Listen. Having these powers are a pain in the ass,the cops are after us,so are the TAPA, The Anti Power Association... having scientists wanting to know how we do such amazing powers that we do with our hands, or well, anything. Don't ask me how I got them, cause i don't know...I was just a kid just like you, a family...a home, but thats gone now. All i have are my guts, and instincts, to help me pass each minute, each hour, each day...if you see this message,and if you are one of me, read this message carefully. Never trust anyone you see...never trust any one of your own, not even me, y'see,they have spies, they use them..to plot there next strategy on us, on how to capture us, in case were somehow giving a "virus" to anyone..we already had to kill one of our own..lets just hope your not next. All I can say is...its a hard life to be me, a Changer.
(Sorry couldnt really think of anything good to call the people with powers...XD)
-Changer Character sheet-
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapon(s)?(Dont have to have one):
Powers(Two please..no more than that.):
When were you a Changer?:
Bio:
Other: (Sorta for like giving a tip about how you can calm down your character or like foreshadowing)
-T.A.P.A Spy Character Sheet- (No more than two...)
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapons(?):
Powers(Once again no more than two):
When were you a changer?:
When you were caught(Can be at birth...):
Bio:
Other: (same as the other other,)
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Reviews
~Equinox~
Story:3/5
It's got a story, but not a REAL story. It's hard to explain. There's a story from a unknown person's view, but not a plot for any long term story.
Grammar:4/5
It's got some good grammar, but just a FEW mistakes. A very few.
Character detail:4/5
Very nice character sheets and variety of character values. It's well done.
Plot Development:2.5/5
It's got a bit of a plot. Trying to put up with being a changeling. Not a massive or expansive plot though, so it's not a very good plot development, but it's got some possibilities.
Overall rating:3/5
Honestly, this is a pretty good RP. I don't plan on joining, but I must say if I had about 1 cell more in my brain to put up with making a CS, I would gladly join. Don't think this is a bad RP because I don't feel like joining, it's honestly really good. My laziness is just getting to me from work.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
Message edited by Supernerd - Sunday, 2011-10-09, 12:14 PM |
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| Supernerd | Date: Friday, 2011-11-11, 0:56 AM | Message # 346 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| "Your father may not be on his feet, but that doesn't mean he can't give out orders" i replied coldly at her. Ignoring her question.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Friday, 2011-11-11, 8:51 AM | Message # 347 |
 ※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| I grabbed him by the hem of his shirt, lifting him up to meet my face. "You talk any more, and you are DEAD!"
I snarled, spitting on his face.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Evie | Date: Friday, 2011-11-11, 9:19 AM | Message # 348 |
 RP'er Without A Life
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| (won't be on for a while going outta town  )
I smiled at Issac and stared at him, just smiling. Then I winked so only Issac could see. Turning to look at Brisk I said," Lets go if they come we wont last long just leave the kid tied up here, He already failed his mission my father will be furious. The only reward you will get are tests." I laughed wickedly.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Demon | Date: Friday, 2011-11-11, 9:48 AM | Message # 349 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| (Oh )
I laughed. "No. This kid isnt getting out of my sight" I snickered.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Friday, 2011-11-11, 11:13 AM | Message # 350 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| The girl's fact hit me hard...he would be furious...he would be angry...but angry enough to put tests on me?...No. I doubted it, they wouldnt do that...I've always been with them, they would do no such thing, they couldnt, not with me. I gritted my teeth, I could feel the chip vibrate slightly, it made me smile, they were coming, and it also just plain tickled me. "5 minutes...they will be here in 5 minutes" i said solidly.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Friday, 2011-11-11, 2:33 PM | Message # 351 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| "Thanks for the info" I smirked. I saw something vibrating right under his skin. And he was smiling, as if it tickled.
So THATS where the chip is...! Ha. What an idiot!
I grabbed Isaac by the neck.
(Permission to take out the chip?)
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Zero | Date: Friday, 2011-11-11, 11:46 PM | Message # 352 |
 Great RP'er
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| When I arrive at the T.A.P.A Facility there was a big that obviously said, "T.A.P.A HQ" but the sign reminded me of something from Star Wars. Getting through the main gates was pathetic, who puts a human guard on the job? But when I got inside the place was extremely empty of Changers, mostly humans, how queer. I found the testing chamber guard post with a video camera for each room, so I checked the scanners for any sign of familiarization, and I saw a girl knock out cold of one of the floors of the testing chamber floors(Angela) and remembered glimpsing her in the forest, I went to help...(My guy is such an idiot XD)
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-12, 1:48 AM | Message # 353 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| (granted, also Zero well done, but be descriptive on how ur helping her)
I stared at her..."too late." I managed to gasp out. People soon bursted into the cave, with guns that shot sedative darts. And 'regular' teens, 3 boys, a blonde haired one, a brown haired one, and a black haired one. "Let him go." the brown haired one said, and in a flash, he had punched her, he had super speed.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-12, 2:08 AM | Message # 354 |
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| I quickly shapeshifted and ran out of the cave feeling like a coward, sadly before I shapeshifted they had got me with one of their darts, I put as much distance as I could between me and the cave as possible and fell to the ground slipping into blackness.
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-12, 6:51 AM | Message # 355 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| Immediatly, I shapeshifted into a dragon. His punch hit the steel-like armor scales on my chest. I roared in thier faces, a black orb forming in my mouth. I grabbed Isaac with one foot, and bashed off the top of the cave, flying upward.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-12, 11:49 AM | Message # 356 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| The soldiers started to fire a brisk, while a couple others were taking away (Zombo's name). The blomde haired kid grinned, as he jumped and flew up, and tryed to grip me, and tugged, trying to get brisk to let go of me. It was all too blurry for me...but I smiled faintly, passing out, and as I slumped down behind my shoulder was a sedative dart.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-12, 12:33 PM | Message # 357 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| I ripped Isaac out of the blondes grip, and sent him flying into a tree with my tail. I blasted fire at the ones taking the others away, and clawed at the other ones.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-12, 12:59 PM | Message # 358 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| The blonde groaned as he fell unconscious, while the rest retreated, running hard, but they had secretly took (zombo's name). The black haired boy was the last guy standing, nor did he fight, he stood there, staring at the dragon, he wasn't in a fighting position. "Dont hurt me...peace?" he asked as he walked slowly to her, and stopped, he was shaking all over the place.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-12, 3:14 PM | Message # 359 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| I snarled, glaring daggers down at him. "Hell no" I smashed him with my tail.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-12, 8:15 PM | Message # 360 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| He slammed against a tree, and murmered as he went unconscious "I could help...you"
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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