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_/\_The Changers_/\_ (My 3rd roleplay..)
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| Supernerd | Date: Sunday, 2011-10-09, 1:16 AM | Message # 1 |
 A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| Oh? So you think this is cool? To be a Change? No, its not, its a nightmare, a nightmare that i hope that never happens to anybody else....i only wished that my hope was true...Listen. Having these powers are a pain in the ass,the cops are after us,so are the TAPA, The Anti Power Association... having scientists wanting to know how we do such amazing powers that we do with our hands, or well, anything. Don't ask me how I got them, cause i don't know...I was just a kid just like you, a family...a home, but thats gone now. All i have are my guts, and instincts, to help me pass each minute, each hour, each day...if you see this message,and if you are one of me, read this message carefully. Never trust anyone you see...never trust any one of your own, not even me, y'see,they have spies, they use them..to plot there next strategy on us, on how to capture us, in case were somehow giving a "virus" to anyone..we already had to kill one of our own..lets just hope your not next. All I can say is...its a hard life to be me, a Changer.
(Sorry couldnt really think of anything good to call the people with powers...XD)
-Changer Character sheet-
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapon(s)?(Dont have to have one):
Powers(Two please..no more than that.):
When were you a Changer?:
Bio:
Other: (Sorta for like giving a tip about how you can calm down your character or like foreshadowing)
-T.A.P.A Spy Character Sheet- (No more than two...)
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapons(?):
Powers(Once again no more than two):
When were you a changer?:
When you were caught(Can be at birth...):
Bio:
Other: (same as the other other,)
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Reviews
~Equinox~
Story:3/5
It's got a story, but not a REAL story. It's hard to explain. There's a story from a unknown person's view, but not a plot for any long term story.
Grammar:4/5
It's got some good grammar, but just a FEW mistakes. A very few.
Character detail:4/5
Very nice character sheets and variety of character values. It's well done.
Plot Development:2.5/5
It's got a bit of a plot. Trying to put up with being a changeling. Not a massive or expansive plot though, so it's not a very good plot development, but it's got some possibilities.
Overall rating:3/5
Honestly, this is a pretty good RP. I don't plan on joining, but I must say if I had about 1 cell more in my brain to put up with making a CS, I would gladly join. Don't think this is a bad RP because I don't feel like joining, it's honestly really good. My laziness is just getting to me from work.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
Message edited by Supernerd - Sunday, 2011-10-09, 12:14 PM |
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| Supernerd | Date: Friday, 2011-11-18, 8:00 PM | Message # 391 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| "So. Apparently the girl can shapeshift?" the guard said, the other guard nodded."Yeah, but shes tied down good and the sedative wil make her be asleep, or mostly the whole time, the scientists say they figured out to control the powers, through a bracelet or collar or something like that..." the guards continued to talk.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Evie | Date: Friday, 2011-11-18, 9:24 PM | Message # 392 |
 RP'er Without A Life
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| "Oh I get it, you want me run away again? You know I've always been a good runner and I can move fast." Then faster then the eye could see, I moved to the bed and pushed it so it slammed against the wall so my dad couldn't reach the red button. "Yeah thats right, I told you I was fast. Where is she dad? C'mon tell me it could be a birthday present for all the ones you've missed."
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Supernerd | Date: Friday, 2011-11-18, 10:23 PM | Message # 393 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| Her Dad eyes were wide in surprise "Shes going to a facility inside the Mountains, in the phillipines. Shes going to be our first subject. Now, leave me alone..." He said, staring into his daughters eyes, if eyes could smirk, they seemed to be smirking at her.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Evie | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 2:50 AM | Message # 394 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| "Thanks for the info dad, time for me to go." I smiled at him and looked over at the big red button.
Soooo tempting....WHAM!! I slammed my hand down on the button and the alarm blared as I ran out of the TAPA HQ unnoticed. I was actually starting to like my dad again even though he was crazy.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 8:33 AM | Message # 395 |
 ※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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Messages: 9627
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| "Yes, he said he'll help me. And I'm keeping you with me just for some payback"
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 12:24 PM | Message # 396 |
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| (Demon, take Isaac and cody somewhere, a new hideout!)
My eyes widened. "No...Cody..." I said, I gritted my teeth then cursed."God damnit! Are you forming a posse or something? FUCK!"
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 1:10 PM | Message # 397 |
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| My brain started rushing with thoughts A way to control our powers!!?? I have to get away! I tried to move again but all that happened was my toe twitched. Great.....
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 1:53 PM | Message # 398 |
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| The van stopped amd the guards got out and lifted her up, like an ambulance did. And quickly took her DEEPER inside. (They stopped inside the hideout) They continued to carry her and placed her in a chair, metal straps covered her, to keep her down. The guards backed away from her and focused at the man "The Subject is here Sir!" The man smiled. "Good..." He was quite young, 19-20 with black hair and thin harry potter-like glasses. "So..." He said as he walked up to her casually, a smirk on his face as he grabbed a necklace. "Y'see...these necklaces...they have diamond in the middle of them...so good luck getting it off...this should activate your brains cortexes, making it seem like your decisions...girls like diamonds, so lets try it on." He said as he went right up to her, and put the necklace on, it was a deep blue, with black in the middle of it. "Now to try it out...Do not attack." He commanded the necklace, as he undid the straps, once they were undone he said. "Stand" (Think of the base from the Movie 'Captain America')
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 2:59 PM | Message # 399 |
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| I felt myself stand up (Note that I still haven't shapeshifted back) I don't attack them but instead settle for growling. I. DO. NOT. LIKE. DIAMONDS!
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Evie | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 3:07 PM | Message # 400 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| I found the TAPA hideout right as they were dragging Alicia inside a big metal door that slammed in my face as soon as I could get to it.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 5:49 PM | Message # 401 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| "Maybe I am" I laughed. Soon, I had found what seemed like a large hole in the ground. I peered in. It was an underground cave. "Perfect" I climbed in.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 6:41 PM | Message # 402 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
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| Isaac-
I struggled again. "LET. ME. GO!"
Cody-
I opened my eyes, hearing a muffled voice...I looked to my right to see Isaac, struggling, and inside his head he was thinking a lot worse things, torture was the smallest of the list.Added (2011-11-19, 6:41 PM)
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The scientists smiled. "Good...good...now lets see who yu really are, 'Change human" he commanded.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 7:38 PM | Message # 403 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
Group: Administrators
Messages: 9627
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| "Why the hell would I?" I smiled.
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-19, 8:10 PM | Message # 404 |
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A Hater/Friend of Equinox
Group: Special
Messages: 3145
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| -Changer Character sheet-
Name: Cody Thompson
Age: 15
Appearance: Cody has thin black hair in a beiber swept way, he has bright blue eyes and thin brown eyebrows, he wears a black muscle t-shirt and Blue skinny Jeans, with white runners, stained with mud. He stands at 5"9 and has a medium build.
Weapon(s)?(Dont have to have one): None.
Powers(Two please..no more than that.): Telekinises
When were you a Changer?: Born one
Bio: Cody was on a mission from T.A.P.A to save Isaac, the head spy of the T.A.P.A corporation, until he met a girl there. And decided to help her.
Other: Cody likes her...alot.Added (2011-11-19, 8:10 PM)
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Cody-
"Mmph...Where are we?" I asked, my hearing become fine and my eyesight now not blurry, looking up at the girl.
Isaac-
I stared at Cody...I could not believe him, why?! Why would he help her!? I pounded on Brisks shoulder. "LET. me. GO! GOD DAMNIT! YOU BITCH! YOU-" *Isaac continues to rant.*
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Sunday, 2011-11-20, 0:51 AM | Message # 405 |
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Famous RP'er
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| I felt myself painfully morph back into a human "Damn you and your stupid experiments" I growl at him and slap him as hard as I can.
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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