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_/\_The Changers_/\_ (My 3rd roleplay..)
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| Supernerd | Date: Sunday, 2011-10-09, 1:16 AM | Message # 1 |
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| Oh? So you think this is cool? To be a Change? No, its not, its a nightmare, a nightmare that i hope that never happens to anybody else....i only wished that my hope was true...Listen. Having these powers are a pain in the ass,the cops are after us,so are the TAPA, The Anti Power Association... having scientists wanting to know how we do such amazing powers that we do with our hands, or well, anything. Don't ask me how I got them, cause i don't know...I was just a kid just like you, a family...a home, but thats gone now. All i have are my guts, and instincts, to help me pass each minute, each hour, each day...if you see this message,and if you are one of me, read this message carefully. Never trust anyone you see...never trust any one of your own, not even me, y'see,they have spies, they use them..to plot there next strategy on us, on how to capture us, in case were somehow giving a "virus" to anyone..we already had to kill one of our own..lets just hope your not next. All I can say is...its a hard life to be me, a Changer.
(Sorry couldnt really think of anything good to call the people with powers...XD)
-Changer Character sheet-
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapon(s)?(Dont have to have one):
Powers(Two please..no more than that.):
When were you a Changer?:
Bio:
Other: (Sorta for like giving a tip about how you can calm down your character or like foreshadowing)
-T.A.P.A Spy Character Sheet- (No more than two...)
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapons(?):
Powers(Once again no more than two):
When were you a changer?:
When you were caught(Can be at birth...):
Bio:
Other: (same as the other other,)
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Reviews
~Equinox~
Story:3/5
It's got a story, but not a REAL story. It's hard to explain. There's a story from a unknown person's view, but not a plot for any long term story.
Grammar:4/5
It's got some good grammar, but just a FEW mistakes. A very few.
Character detail:4/5
Very nice character sheets and variety of character values. It's well done.
Plot Development:2.5/5
It's got a bit of a plot. Trying to put up with being a changeling. Not a massive or expansive plot though, so it's not a very good plot development, but it's got some possibilities.
Overall rating:3/5
Honestly, this is a pretty good RP. I don't plan on joining, but I must say if I had about 1 cell more in my brain to put up with making a CS, I would gladly join. Don't think this is a bad RP because I don't feel like joining, it's honestly really good. My laziness is just getting to me from work.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
Message edited by Supernerd - Sunday, 2011-10-09, 12:14 PM |
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| Supernerd | Date: Friday, 2011-11-25, 6:09 PM | Message # 436 |
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| Cody-
"Yeah, he's good at that. He does that to-" All of a sudden a girl slammed me into a wall. Brisk claiming that that was (Evie). I gritted my teeth and shoved her away from me. "Ever heard of saying hello?" I scoffed at her, as I then looked back at brisk. "When im done making the computer, I should be able to hack into their internet, and find info about all the other Changers that are Captured." I said, as I connected the blue wire with the internet wire then furrowed my eyebrows. "Drat, blue goes with yellow, not red..." I muttered to myself.
Isaac-
My eyes opened, seeing Cody muttering to himself, and the two other girls. I struggled against the ropes. "Cody! Why do you help these people!? WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS TO ME?! TO YOURSELF! Y'KNOW THEY'LL HUNT YOU DOWN! JUST LIKE THEY DID TO YOUR BROTHER!" I screamed at him.
Cody-
I flinched at the sound of my brother. "My brothers reasons were well intended..." I said quietly, setting up the wires at the back of the computer screen, which wasn't yet attached to the keyboard.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Evie | Date: Friday, 2011-11-25, 6:42 PM | Message # 437 |
 RP'er Without A Life
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| "Sorry." I told the strange boy, "No harm intended, I just had a rough day. And my name is Virra by the way." I smiled to him then turned to glare at Issac.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Supernerd | Date: Friday, 2011-11-25, 7:00 PM | Message # 438 |
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| Cody-
"My names Cody, also, no need to introduce your name, I already knew it. " I said, continuing on the computer I was making.
Isaac-
I stared at Virra. "God damnit, why wont you guys let me go, or at least have some freedom" I muttered.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Friday, 2011-11-25, 7:15 PM | Message # 439 |
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| I looked at the TAPA agent not trusting him. Then went to stand by Virra.
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Evie | Date: Friday, 2011-11-25, 9:15 PM | Message # 440 |
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RP'er Without A Life
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| "How did you know my name? My dad?" I asked Cody then turned to Issac, "Were not stupid and your going anywhere so get used to it!"
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Supernerd | Date: Friday, 2011-11-25, 9:36 PM | Message # 441 |
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| Cody-
I shut the back panel of the circuitry. "I have telekinises, so I can read minds, no need to get alarmed." I said calmly as I stood up, brushing myself off lightly. "Alright...the computer is almost finished, its getting dark and we should get some sleep." I said.
Isaac-
I scowled. "You can't hack T.A.P.A. , its probably impossible. your not that smart at-"
Cody-
"Shutup! " I yelled, kicking him in the face and watched as he fell unconscious. "Man he's fucking ignorant...." I said as i tore off some of my sleeve and put the gag on Isaac. "There, now he can sleep." I flashed a smile at Brisk, man she was pretty.
(Read my CS for cody and you'll understand, on page 27) ((or maybe 26))
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Friday, 2011-11-25, 10:33 PM | Message # 442 |
 ※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| (Lol...
Someone likes Brisk...
Apparantly, 'alot'
XD)
I smiled back. "I'm starting to like you" I watched Isaac fall unconcious. "If you can read my mind... Then do you know about my family, and home? I wonder... Sometimes people cant access that part of my brain, as if its sealed..."
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Friday, 2011-11-25, 10:53 PM | Message # 443 |
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| Cody-
My look brightened at the sound of her starting to like me, but I shook my head. "No, I haven't looked through your head that much, but i'll try accessing it." I closed my eyes, it always worked better if I did. I then imagined the book, the book of Brisk. It was a black and a lucious red hard-cover, cause she was quite tough. I flipped through the 'pages' of it, looking through...eventually I got to the page, but it was smudged, some things were erased as well. Or at least that's how I saw it. I closed the 'book' and opened my eyes. "No....I cant, its too...well, blurry to read it." I said, as I then sat down against a wall. "You should get some sleep...cause this'll be the only time when Isaac actually shuts up." I slowly closed my eyes. Falling asleep
(DONT timeskip, trust me its Isaac's turn to do some damage, but I want people to go to sleep)
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-26, 2:13 AM | Message # 444 |
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| I slid down to the floor exhausted and quickly fell asleep but still kept a part of my mind open in case of emergency.
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Evie | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-26, 4:01 AM | Message # 445 |
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| I was not falling asleep, not now. "I'll stay on alert and wake you up if anything happens." I told Brisk the went to stand at the opening of the cave.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-26, 9:02 AM | Message # 446 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| "We'll take shifts.." I mumbled, lying down. However, I still kept my brain awake incase I needed to wake up.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-26, 12:25 PM | Message # 447 |
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| -After a couple hours....-
Isaac-
My eyes opened, flickering around the room, seeing people asleep...I think everyone was asleep...perfect, I looked over at the sharp rock that i've been careful not to think about the past couple days, I shuffled over to it, working on the rope, rubbing it hard against it. I broke into a grin as it snapped, quiet silently, I quickly then shook off the ropes, and slowly got up, "wow..." I whispered. "hehe. Suckers." I whispered silently as I headed to the exit of the cave, and stopped in place. Virra. God damnit. I walked up quietly behind her....and quickly wrapped my arms against her neck from behind. Strangiling her. "Die!" I hissed into her left ear.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Demon | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-26, 12:28 PM | Message # 448 |
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| I peeped open one eye, and saw Isaac. I quietly slid into the shadows, coming out as a wolf. I was concealed in the darkness, unseen.
I quietly padded out behind Isaac, biting the back of his neck. Just enough pressure to painfully knock him out.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Supernerd | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-26, 12:43 PM | Message # 449 |
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| (Here comes the alarm clock XD)
Isaac-
My grip on Virra suddenly lessened, as pain entered my whole body, I could feel blood start to drip down on me, and stain my clothes. I was out of breath for a second, then closed me eyes as I screamed in the highest pitch voice I ever screamed in before.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
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| Evie | Date: Saturday, 2011-11-26, 1:04 PM | Message # 450 |
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| I fell to the ground gasping for air. Then became unconscious.
Shoot for the moon★ ☆ ✰
If you miss★ ☆ ✰
You'll still land among the stars★ ☆ ✰
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