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_/\_The Changers_/\_ (My 3rd roleplay..)
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| Supernerd | Date: Sunday, 2011-10-09, 1:16 AM | Message # 1 |
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| Oh? So you think this is cool? To be a Change? No, its not, its a nightmare, a nightmare that i hope that never happens to anybody else....i only wished that my hope was true...Listen. Having these powers are a pain in the ass,the cops are after us,so are the TAPA, The Anti Power Association... having scientists wanting to know how we do such amazing powers that we do with our hands, or well, anything. Don't ask me how I got them, cause i don't know...I was just a kid just like you, a family...a home, but thats gone now. All i have are my guts, and instincts, to help me pass each minute, each hour, each day...if you see this message,and if you are one of me, read this message carefully. Never trust anyone you see...never trust any one of your own, not even me, y'see,they have spies, they use them..to plot there next strategy on us, on how to capture us, in case were somehow giving a "virus" to anyone..we already had to kill one of our own..lets just hope your not next. All I can say is...its a hard life to be me, a Changer.
(Sorry couldnt really think of anything good to call the people with powers...XD)
-Changer Character sheet-
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapon(s)?(Dont have to have one):
Powers(Two please..no more than that.):
When were you a Changer?:
Bio:
Other: (Sorta for like giving a tip about how you can calm down your character or like foreshadowing)
-T.A.P.A Spy Character Sheet- (No more than two...)
Name:
Age:
Appearance:
Weapons(?):
Powers(Once again no more than two):
When were you a changer?:
When you were caught(Can be at birth...):
Bio:
Other: (same as the other other,)
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Reviews
~Equinox~
Story:3/5
It's got a story, but not a REAL story. It's hard to explain. There's a story from a unknown person's view, but not a plot for any long term story.
Grammar:4/5
It's got some good grammar, but just a FEW mistakes. A very few.
Character detail:4/5
Very nice character sheets and variety of character values. It's well done.
Plot Development:2.5/5
It's got a bit of a plot. Trying to put up with being a changeling. Not a massive or expansive plot though, so it's not a very good plot development, but it's got some possibilities.
Overall rating:3/5
Honestly, this is a pretty good RP. I don't plan on joining, but I must say if I had about 1 cell more in my brain to put up with making a CS, I would gladly join. Don't think this is a bad RP because I don't feel like joining, it's honestly really good. My laziness is just getting to me from work.
Some say its nice to have good signatures....
Well.
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There you have it.
Message edited by Supernerd - Sunday, 2011-10-09, 12:14 PM |
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| Zombo104 | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 10:49 AM | Message # 676 |
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| I walked over to her and saw the bullets on the ground. "One still stuck in you?" I ask looking at her bleeding shoulder.
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 10:54 AM | Message # 677 |
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From the Forest
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| ~Silver
"I can wait for more energy or heal over the bullet, not good options"
On The Edge Of Imagination And Logic
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| Zombo104 | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 10:56 AM | Message # 678 |
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| "Or.... Do you trust me enough to try to get it out? Or do you think its too deep?"
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 10:57 AM | Message # 679 |
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From the Forest
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| ~Silver
"To deep," I pause, "I should be fine to wait. If I rap it."
On The Edge Of Imagination And Logic
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| Equinox | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 10:58 AM | Message # 680 |
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| A man with a black hat on his head approaches them.
"I trust you've met the man I've been looking for?"
~Glacial Malphite: The Shard of the Monolith~
"I hear rumors that the Shard of the Monolith is an unstoppable force. They aren't rumors."-Nausus, on the topic of Malphite's arrival.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 11:02 AM | Message # 681 |
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| I glanced around looking at the suspiciously unusual mess we made. "Erm... The guy who just tried to kill us? Ya... I wouldn't call that meeting." I was fighting every instinct to run. What if he's secretly TAPA? Or if he knows we're changers he'll turn us in to them for sure
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Equinox | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 11:05 AM | Message # 682 |
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| "He's hunting changers, killing anything along the way. Are there any more changers around here that got split up from all of you? If so, you may want to find them before he does. He has things called Spirit Tools, which make him more than just a human."
~Glacial Malphite: The Shard of the Monolith~
"I hear rumors that the Shard of the Monolith is an unstoppable force. They aren't rumors."-Nausus, on the topic of Malphite's arrival.
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| Zombo104 | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 11:07 AM | Message # 683 |
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| I breathed a sigh of relief Okay, he's probably not going to turn us in then.. "Brisk, where did Virra and Isaac go?" I turned back to the man "What are these 'Spirit Tools' and what can they do?" I ask
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
Message edited by Zombo104 - Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 11:08 AM |
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| Equinox | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 11:11 AM | Message # 684 |
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| "They...They absorb the life from people, in this case, changers, and he can use their abilities through those tools. If he manages to kill any changers with true power, he will basically be a changer himself. With that type of power, he wont have any kind of judgement, and he will fight anything and everything, to his inevitable death."
"Basically, he aims to become immortal."
~Glacial Malphite: The Shard of the Monolith~
"I hear rumors that the Shard of the Monolith is an unstoppable force. They aren't rumors."-Nausus, on the topic of Malphite's arrival.
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| Demon | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 2:26 PM | Message # 685 |
 ※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| I looked at Alisa. "I left them behind. I bit Isaac, and Virra was hurt."
I turned to the new guy. "An immortal, eh? Is he mentally insane?"
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Equinox | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 3:28 PM | Message # 686 |
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| "Depends on how you look at it. Technically? Yes. Directly, no. His Motives are the same as medieval kings. Obtain as much power as possible, in order to become immortalized."
~Glacial Malphite: The Shard of the Monolith~
"I hear rumors that the Shard of the Monolith is an unstoppable force. They aren't rumors."-Nausus, on the topic of Malphite's arrival.
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| Demon | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 4:06 PM | Message # 687 |
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※You shouldnt anger me. ಠ_ಠ※
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| "Thats sad" I muttered.
ಠ_ಠ (づ ￣ ³￣)づ
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 5:59 PM | Message # 688 |
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From the Forest
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| ~Silver
The bleeding stoped but the bullet was still in my shoulder. I take a minute to stand up, "So another random that wants immortality, but this random has the mean to do it. So what do we do?"
On The Edge Of Imagination And Logic
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| Zombo104 | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 6:41 PM | Message # 689 |
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| "Hmm, well one we should find Virra and Isaac before Mr.Insane finds them first. Second we need to get Cody to remember everything after he wakes up... And that's as far a my ideas go for now."
It's funny until someone gets hurt. Then it's just hilarious.
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| Kenzieroo | Date: Tuesday, 2011-12-13, 6:44 PM | Message # 690 |
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From the Forest
Group: Moderators
Messages: 7524
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| ~Silver
I sigh, The more I'm out here the more I'm starting to think that living in my house my whole life wax a bad idea on my parents part
On The Edge Of Imagination And Logic
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