Story: 7.5/10
Grammar: 6/10
Originality: N/a
Effort: 9/10
Character Sheet: 10/10
Review: Before I start with the actual review, I'd like to point out that even though this is not a fanfic RP, I gave it a N/a for originality becasue it SHOULD be in the GTR forum. Now, onto the review. The story itself was written fairly well, but what subtracted form it was that instead of writting events that happened normally, the creator(Zombo104) put a few words in **'s to represent a change in the story. Without this, the story could've been about a 9/10. While there were no obvious mispellings, putting words in **'s, I counted as incorrect grammar, as well as putting a person's name and then a : to show speaking instead of using ""s. Effort was originaly going to be about 7.5 or 8, but I decided to raise it to 9 as the creator said that a list of viruses would be coming soon, which vertainly means you put effort into the RP, however, story and character sheet are the only things there for the moment. Character sheet however, was a 10/10, containing all the neccasary information, as well as a few extra bits and bobs. Overall, this seems like a pretty decnt RP, it just had some minor mistakes.
~Zyphon, The Flying Penguin
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