Story: 8/10
Grammar: 10/10
Originality: 4.5/10
Effort: 9/10
Character Sheet: 9/10
Review: The story itself was written fairly well, it's just that it could've been better. Not bad at all, good infact, just not amazing. As for grammar, no obvious problems that I could spot there, so 10/10 for that. However, having a story with a "back-stabbing" king and kids with powers isn't all that original, so not many points in that category. But effort is another case completely! There were loads of powers listed, showing you put lots of effort into this, but there were no rules or admins, things that aren't really needed, but it doesn't take much to add. Character Sheet was pretty good, but it seemed there were too many things. Such as "Ride a dragon?" That wasn't neccacary. If they did ride a dragon, the RPer would've added that him/her self. So... Yes. Only 9 points. So, yes, that's about it.
Grammar: 10/10
Originality: 4.5/10
Effort: 9/10
Character Sheet: 9/10
Review: The story itself was written fairly well, it's just that it could've been better. Not bad at all, good infact, just not amazing. As for grammar, no obvious problems that I could spot there, so 10/10 for that. However, having a story with a "back-stabbing" king and kids with powers isn't all that original, so not many points in that category. But effort is another case completely! There were loads of powers listed, showing you put lots of effort into this, but there were no rules or admins, things that aren't really needed, but it doesn't take much to add. Character Sheet was pretty good, but it seemed there were too many things. Such as "Ride a dragon?" That wasn't neccacary. If they did ride a dragon, the RPer would've added that him/her self. So... Yes. Only 9 points. So, yes, that's about it.
~Zyphon, The Flying Penguin