Story: 9/10

Grammar: 10/10

Originality: 6/10

Effort: 10/10

Character Sheet: 10/10

Review: The story of this RP was fairly well written, I don't really have any complaints, just that it could have flown better. Instead, it just felt like, "Here's the backstory, now join". The grammar, no problems that I could see, however, originality wise, this RP didn't do so well. It reminds me GREATLY like an RP Kenzieroo made, also, "power" RPs are generally overused. However, having it take place on a different planet and having a villian other that the original evil one saved it from being a 3/10. Effort wise, any RP in this format almost always get's a 10/10. Character sheet, It's lamost always easy to get a 10/10. In general, I believe this is a good RP, unfortunatly, due to the lack of actually any new people joining, I don't think this will get very far, and would probably do better as a story, as overused RPs tend to be forgotten about by many of the people who have been here a while it seems.

 

~Zyphon, The Flying Penguin