Story: 9/10

Grammar: 10/10

Originality: 8/10

Effort: 15/10

Character Sheet: 10/10

Review: The story was well written for the most part, but in opther parts it almost seemed as if a tutorial, and not a story. Though I can see why you did this, otherwise it would have been very difficult to explain everything. As for grammar, no complaints. Originality, well, people having powers isn't exactly the most original thing ever... But as far as effort. Wow. I would never have been able to put that much time into an RP, without losing my sanity of course. And character sheet, again, no complaints.

 

~Zyphon, The Flying Penguin